There's definitely some issues that jump out to me on first read.
1. I'm not sure about "indivisible". An area should be able to self-govern if desired. More detail needed.
2. Awful. Removing people's voting rights in general is bad, and something as nebulous as "a criminal offence" is incredibly easy to abuse. Are people no longer citizens if they steal a loaf of bread? Also, voting age here is 16/18.
4. No. Guns are incredibly rare where I am. I'd rather not have one, and I'd prefer not to risk getting shot every time some asshole on the street gets mad.
7. Limiting land to a single use is generally not a great idea. What if for instance you have too much agricultural land and not enough housing?
10. A central state-owned bank isn't a bad idea, but abolishing all non-state banks is iffy. Should the government really have so much direct control over everyone's finances?
12. Your salary should not be based on the amount of unprotected sex you have. That's just silly. Other support should be available for those who need it.